"Taking a leading role in putting a fresh face on this world-famous celebrity mecca ..."
Of the first six words, three are "ing" forms. Yuck, yuck, and yuck. And the utter hollowness of "taking a role in putting" deeply offends my editing sensibilities.
I thought about just chopping off the first five words and starting with "putting." That would make a better sentence, but it would also change the writer's meaning.
So, taking a leading role in holding my nose, I left the phrase untouched.

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