Showing posts with label poor word choice. Show all posts
Showing posts with label poor word choice. Show all posts

Thursday, July 15, 2010

Copy Editing Conundrum du Jour

I'm still not sure what to make of this sentence I came across in my copy-editing work today:

Guests are given glowsticks to guide their way through the already freaky figures and dioramas—a gauntlet that’s pretty scary to run even with the lights on.

It's weird enough that it seems to be based on a metaphor mixing "run the gamut" (range, scale) and "throw down the gauntlet" (glove). But "a gauntlet that's scary to run"?

I changed it to "a course that's pretty scary to run." But it'll be a while before I'm confident about it ...

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Tuesday, August 25, 2009

Copy Edits du Jour


It's as enticing as the caramel topping on a candied apple.

(changed to)

It's as enticing as a caramel apple.

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Autumn is a great time to enjoy the region's ambient weather.

(changed to)

Autumn is a great time to enjoy the region's weather.


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