Friday, October 14, 2011

Copy Edit du Jour

"Our office handles a full range of podiatric needs including sports medicine and deformities of the foot such as Bunions, Hammertoes and Neuromas."

Changed to:

"... bunions, hammertoes and neuromas."

Classic example of overuse of capitals. Though I almost like the idea of Hammertoes as a proper name - a former ballet dancer turned hard-boiled detective? (Couldn't be any worse that the current prime-time lineup.)


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6 comments:

Adrian Morgan said...

"Neuromas" sounds like a religious festival for people who worship brains. "Neuro" as in neuroscience plus "mas" as in Christmas. Brain festival!

Nice to see you blogging again. Don't forget to visit mine once in a while (outerhoard.wordpress.com).

June Casagrande said...

I like it. Or it could be a celebration of the day someone finally got some nerve.

CathLab1981 said...

Hi chica! When I read this it made me think of U. Ain't nothin' but a G thang baby! Holla back West Siiide! http://www.slate.com/articles/life/gaming/2011/10/scrabble_cheating_scandal_did_a_player_really_get_strip_searched.html

seanhtaylor said...

As a pulp writer, I may just have to "borrow" (that's writer for steal) Hammertoes for an upcoming noir story. That's classic.

June Casagrande said...

I'd be honored!

Doyle Harcavy said...

You didn't mention the sentence's most egregious error. “Bunions, Hammertoes and Neuromas” aren’t “podiatric needs.” They’re podiatric conditions. Podiatric needs would be cures or palliatives for bunions, hammertoes, and neoromas. I assume you flagged it for the author’s attention.

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