It's as enticing as the caramel topping on a candied apple.
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It's as enticing as a caramel apple.
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Autumn is a great time to enjoy the region's ambient weather.
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Autumn is a great time to enjoy the region's weather.
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Omit needless words!
(Sorry for quoting Strunk and White on your blog, but this is totally something folks don't think about enough, huh?)
As much as I rank on Strunk and White, I must admit that this particular piece of advice can be very valuable. I spend so much of my copy-editing days making sentences more effective just by cutting out the lard. It's amazing. Here's another example from a story I edited today:
“September, October, November: Those months are the most beautiful of the time of year here,” agreed John Doe, saying that what stands out in his mind the most is: “the sunsets are tremendous.”
Why, oh why, did the writer think she needed “saying that what stands out in his mind most is”? Slashed that right out, I did.
Regarding your first edit - I can see why the writer included the verbiage he or she did.
I do not find caramel apples enticing (I don't like apples), but I do love licking the caramel off of a candied apple.
Just saying.
By the way, I love your blog.
You know, I actually wondered for a moment whether that's what she meant. Then I remembered: I am thy copy editor, I'll tell YOU what you mean. : )
Thanks.
If you enjoy caramel apples and also enjoy gloating, then it may interest you that we don't have caramel apples in Australia. (We have toffee apples, though.)
Hi ... it's been a while since I've left a comment here, mostly because it's a while since you wrote anything that provoked a response. Meanwhile I've published some fiction over at http://ficly.com/ which often forces me to omit words (needless or otherwise). My username is Zerrakhi.
I know I've been kinda lame here lately. I went through this weird no-motivation-to-do-nuthin' phase that I'm just now starting to pull out of (I hope).
Re toffee/caramel, I'm looking them up now and I'm a little confused. American Heritage says caramel is: "A smooth chewy candy made with sugar, butter, cream or milk, and flavoring." It says toffee is: "A hard, chewy candy made of brown sugar or molasses and butter."
Yet I bet that soft-vs.-hard distinction doesn't apply everywhere (if here).
I guess I always thought of "a toffee" as a caramel.
If you look up "toffee apple" and "caramel apple" in Wikipedia, there are pictures. Toffee apple redirects to "candy apple" (but I can confirm it's a toffee apple in the picture) and apparently caramel apples are also called "taffy apples" (I have never seen a caramel apple before).
As for the definitions, there's nothing remotely chewy about the coating on a toffee apple. However, defining confectionaries would be a whole other topic.
Aha! Now I get it.
Do you guys have those Kraft caramel candies in the stores? They're little individually wrapped cubes of chewy goodness? Well, there's usually a recipe on the bag (or at least there was when I was a kid) for how to make caramel apples. Here's a link with a photo: http://www.kraftfoods.com/kf/recipes/caramel-dipped-apples-55497.aspx
As you know, we Americans have a long history of letting corporations define our culture. So maybe it's just the mighty hand of Kraft failing to extend its reach all the way across the globe.
Anyhoo, I DO prefer the caramel ones. Sooooo gooey.
I'm not at all aware of any Kraft caramel candies.* However, because Kraft own Vegemite, they have their fingers very much in our culture as well.
* Which probably wouldn't be called candies here, but never mind that.
I had no idea Kraft controlled Vegemite. It's a weird business world we live in.
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